Experiment #7

Faux Proverb

When the fish have swum their last
And the plum is over ripe
When your future’s in the past
Along with all your hype.
Then raise yourself a glass,
And toast the man who’s won
Cuz even if ‘e stole your lass
He canna steal your fun!

Peer Review the Experiment

Tell the author how he did and how he could do better.
Be Honest. Be Specific. Be Constructive.