Experiment #44

It’s My Friend’s Car?

Jeff tried to roll down the window of the unrestored 1984 Toyota Cressida. He searched for the automatic switch, but they built this car before any of those fancy options were commonplace. He found a handle that looked promising. After two cranks the handle came off in his hand, and try as he might, he could not get it back on. He took a deep breath and turned his attention through the window crack to the man in the uniform outside.

IMFC_feature“You have a tail light out,” the officer said.

“Sorry, Sir. Thank you, Sir,” Jeff said.

“Could you turn the car off, please?”

“Sir, it might not start again if I shut it off.” George had given him strict instructions that the spark plugs were misfiring and, “Beulah mightn’t start again fer eight, nine hours.”

At least that’s what he thought George had said. The thunking of the engine and the way George slurred his words together–like two colors of paint poured in the same pan–made him difficult to understand.

“Very well,” the officer said. He had already tired of Jeff’s face. “License and registration.”

Jeff breathed through his teeth and cursed George. He pulled his license out of his wallet and pushed it through the sliver of open window.

“I like your ‘I shot the sherif,’ bumper sticker,” the officer said without smiling. “It’s almost as good as your license plate ‘PGPTRL’.”

“I’m sorry,” Jeff said. “This is my friend’s car.” Words seemed like a good way to hide. “I don’t know him that well.” Jeff laughed though it wasn’t funny. “Just met him at a friend’s poker game a few months ago. He needed a ride to the airport… I needed a car while mine’s in the shop… seemed like a good fit.” Jeff laughed again. He touched the door and looked up at the officer. “He calls it Beulah…”

“Registration?” The officer asked.

Jeff nodded. He turned toward the glove compartment with a resigned look, as if he had just been elected to enter the dark cave first. He reached for the glove compartment, but the automatic seatbelt had locked in place and he could not reach. He wrestled with the belt. With each lunge for the glove compartment he moved further and further away as the seatbelt ratcheted tighter.

Jeff sighed. Then came an epiphany. The seatbelt had moved into place when he closed the door. He opened the door a crack. The seatbelt disengaged.

The officer leaned toward the window to cut the glare. This was turning into more than a routine traffic stop.

Jeff lunged for the glove compartment one last time. His legs kicked out automatically for balance.

The officer shouted with pain and stepped back. Jeff turned toward the cry as an officer-sized face print remained on the window.

As the red-faced police officer came back into view, Jeff’s fumbling fingers opened the glove compartment. Out fell two dog food cans, a tiny hula skirt, a glass and metal object Jeff couldn’t identify (but the officer could have if he weren’t rubbing his nose) and a half-frozen package of bratwurst.

Jeff smiled nervously and reached inside the glove compartment. He rifled through an ample supply of brochures taken from small towns in far off states. Yet still he found no registration.

Jeff turned back to the officer. “Umm… I’m sorry… about your face… and ummm… like I said… it’s my friend’s car… I can’t seem to find the registration.”

The officer rubbed his nose and wrote on his ticket pad. He flipped the first ticket up and continued writing. He flipped another ticket up and continued writing. As he flipped the fourth ticket up he said, “You do know you were going forty-five in a seventy-five zone.”

Jeff laughed again. He mimicked driving a race car through sharp turns. “That seem’s to be the top speed on this chicken crate…” Jeff said.

The officer looked up but his expression didn’t change.

“The uhhh… the ramp that I… that I used,” Jeff continued in a low tone, “put me in the left lane and it didn’t feel safe to swi-”

“Speaking of chicken crates,” the officer said. He pulled down his sunglasses to see more clearly. “Do you have a license for transporting poultry?”

Jeff looked behind him. Where the backseat should have been there stood four crates of live chickens and an ornate bird-cage holding a parrot. Their clucks, clicks, and warbles had been so muffled by the rattling and thunking engine that Jeff had almost forgotten about them. “Do I need a license?” he asked.

George had just shrugged when Jeff asked about the backseat fowl. “Just some birds,” he had said. “I threw some feed back there. They’ll be fine.” Jeff knew nothing of the care and feeding of chickens and parrots, but that seemed insufficient as a feeding rubric for a week. When Jeff pushed further, though, George just said, “They’ll be fine. Don’t worry about it.”

“Your friend’s?” the officer asked.

Jeff laughed. “Yeah…” he said.

“Awwk weeehoo, Awwk weeehoo,” the parrot said over the engine noise, “Jeff’s got the munchies. Jeff needs a hit.”

The officer looked at Jeff. “You ever smoke anything more than cigarettes?” he asked.

“I don’t know how that bird knows my name, Sir. My friend, George, picked me up from my house, we drove to the airport, then he flew away and I’m driving home. That’s all I know.

“I’m telling you,” Jeff said, his voice rising an octave “none of this is mine. It’s all my frien-”

Thunk, thunk, thunk. The repetitive, random thunking crystallized into three straight beats.

“What’s that?” The officer asked.

“My friend said the engine does that sometimes.”

Three long thunks followed and then three shorter ones.

“Shut off the car.”


The officer was not requesting.

Jeff turned the key and the engine spluttered to a halt.

The thunks continued in a pattern: three long thunks, followed by three short, then three long ones again.

“Your trunk says SOS.”

“My friend’s trunk,” Jeff whispered.

The car was too old for a trunk release so at the officer’s behest, Jeff got out and opened the trunk with the key.

As the trunk opened a mime jumped out. He hugged the officer. He pointed at Jeff and mimed crying, then he imitated a compass and pulled himself along a rope until the officer finally pointed up the road and said, “That’s North.” The mime hugged him silently again and ran up the road and out of sight.

“You’d’ve thought he’d be quieter,” Jeff said trying to sound ironic.

Just then over the officers dashboard radio came, “All units, be on the lookout for a silver, 1984 Toyota Cressida with license plate P-G-P-T-R-L it’s wanted in connection with a mini-gulf incident. Over.”

The officer looked down at the golf clubs and hippopotamus head in the trunk. He turned toward Jeff.

Jeff sighed.

“Would you believe,” he asked, “it’s my friend’s car?”

2 peer reviews of “It’s My Friend’s Car?

  1. hey john .. my name’s kurt struble. I’ve been writing more than full time for the past 4+ years. I only work at the most, three days per week. so, I have time on my hands even on those days I work I can spend 6-8 hours … writing into the night until at least eleven o’clock. recently I had hip replacement surgery so I can’t work at all and won’t be able to work for four to six weeks. i’m in heaven. i’m not supposed to leave the house … . oh darn! some days i’ll sit here for ten hours or more. can’t tear myself away from the words. I love words. love to play with them. i’m very serious about definitions though, which gets me in trouble with people because I end up asking questions about meaning. most of the time, words are conveyors of humor, to me anyway. the ”unexpected” word is what makes people surprised and when people are surprised by the unexpected word, this is what causes laughter. I love it when people laugh. humor. humor is … the unexpected which is what I like about your story. every incident is totally unexpected except the element of, ”it’s not my car,” which holds the story together. chickens in the back seat? funny. the parrot saying your name? i’m not sure it was necessary; a redundancy of the bird concept. let the chickens stand alone. a red wing black bird suddenly flying around inside the car then going out the window, hitting the officer in the forehead, dropping a load of bird shit on the tickets … nawwww … . anyway .,.. the mime in the trunk was a little ”dreamy” for me. all of the sudden I thought the ending was going to be one of those, ”… I woke up in my bedroom ……. blah, blah, blah … it was all a dream.” anyway, good humor is hard to find I think. you have good instincts for it, I think again. i’ll read more and comment. if you don’t mind reading some of my work i’ll direct you to where you can find some. I have a blog that’s titled, ”The Big House and Other Stories; Short Stories From the Golden Age of Small Town America”. the address [email protected]. i’ll friend you if you want. kurt struble at facebook. I have a really funny piece i’d like to send you via because it doesn’t fit the genre of my blog. would you permit me to do this? i’ll read more of what you have written. as you can tell i’m very loquacious. ks

    • Hi Kurt,

      Thanks for your thoughts. Fair point on the parrot, and perhaps the mime pushed things a little too far.

      Unfortunately, with a full time job and family responsibilities, plus actually finding time to write myself, my time for critiquing other’s work is rather limited. Please feel free to send it through the contact page and I’ll try to get some feedback to you, but it may be a while.

      Thanks, again! I look forward to hearing your thoughts on my other stories.

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